Prospecting emails: three examples, and the one that gets deleted

You have no salesperson. Work arrives through people who already know you, in bursts you do not control, and at some point someone told you to send some emails. The question you actually have is not whether this works. It is what the email should say.

So this article is mostly emails. Three I would send, one I would not, and an account of what every sentence is doing. The companies in them are invented. The structure is not.

What a referral does, and what an email has to replace

A referral does three things at once, and none of them are visible to you. It explains what you are worth, in the voice of someone the other person already trusts. It arrives at a company that resembles the one making the introduction. And it lands in the week that company needs the work.

An email has to do those three jobs with none of that credit. This is why most advice about cold email copy misses the point: the words are the third problem. Who you write to, and when, decides more than any subject line.

Choosing who to write to is the part my own product takes over: Klientee reads a company's website, works out who pays it and why, and finds decision makers who resemble those customers. It is my product, and further down I say plainly who should not buy it.

Example 1: when there is a dated reason to write

An engineering practice of eight people. It sizes compressed air systems for food factories. The prospect has just announced a second production line.

Subject: your second line in January

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Hello Marta,

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I saw the announcement about the second line at your Nantes plant in January.

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We size compressed air systems for food factories. On a new line it tends to get specified last, and then it becomes the thing that caps output.

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Two questions, and this is not a pitch: is the air system already specified, and is it sized for one line or for two?

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If it is handled, ignore this message. If it is not, I can tell you in fifteen minutes what we would check first.

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Pierre

Ninety words. What each part is doing:

• The subject is about their January, not about me. No quick question, no name of my company.
• The first line is a checkable fact with a date on it. That single sentence is what separates this from a list send, and the reader can tell in two seconds.
• One sentence says what I do, attached to their situation instead of to a menu of services.
• The question costs under a minute to answer and does not require a meeting to be granted first.
• The exit is explicit. Ignore this message costs nothing to write and takes the pressure out of replying.
• Nothing attached, no calendar link, no paragraph about our values.

Example 2: when there is no trigger, only a resemblance

Most of the people worth writing to have not announced anything. Then the opening credit has to come from resemblance.

Subject: the report that arrives after the van leaves

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Hello Jonas,

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We work with two window manufacturers of about your size. In both cases the expensive problem was not production. It was the handover: the quality report reached the office three days after the installation van had already left.

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Is that something you live with, or have you solved it?

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If you have solved it, I would honestly like to know how. If you have not, I will send you the two page checklist we use. Nothing to fill in.

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Claire

• The claim about two similar firms is testable. He can ask which ones, and I had better be able to answer.
• The problem is named in the words a client would use at the end of a bad week, not in the words a brochure uses. The report arrives three days after the van has left is the sentence that earns a reply.
• The question accepts a one word answer, including the answer that costs me the sale.
• What is offered is a document, not a meeting. A meeting costs him thirty minutes before he knows anything. A checklist costs him nothing.

Example 3: the second email, which adds something

Subject: unchanged, same thread

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Hello Jonas,

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Adding the thing I should have put in the first message: the checklist is here. Four of its eight points are about the handover.

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If this is not a subject for you this year, reply with the word no and I will stop writing. That is a useful answer, not a rejection.

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Claire

• Same thread, same subject. A fresh subject line reads as a fresh campaign.
• It adds one thing. Just following up asks the reader to do the work twice and gives him nothing for it.
• It makes refusal cheap, in one word, which is the only way you ever find out.

I stop at two. The third message is where a sequence starts working for the tool and against you. That is my own rule rather than a measured finding, and I would rather say so.

The same email, written the way most of them are

Subject: Quick question

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Hi {{first_name}},

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I hope this email finds you well. I came across [Company] and was impressed by what you are doing in the window manufacturing space. We help manufacturers streamline operations and drive efficiency gains of up to 30%. Would you be open to a quick 15 minute call next week to explore synergies?

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Best,

The failures, in order of seriousness:

• Nothing in it could only have been written to him. Every sentence survives a find and replace, and he knows it.
• Up to 30% is a number with no owner, no year and no measurement behind it. One number like that discredits the rest of the message.
• The compliment is unfalsifiable, so it reads as a template rather than as attention.
• The only ask is fifteen minutes of his time, requested before he has received anything at all.
• The real cost is not that this email fails. It is that it trains his eye, and that his filter starts learning about your domain.

Here is the hardest thing I have read from someone on the receiving end, a small business owner about the cold emails he gets:

If you were good, we would have found you and hired you already.

He is wrong about you and right about his inbox. Being good and being findable are two different properties, and almost nothing in a generic email argues for the first. A dated, specific, checkable first line is the whole argument. There is no clever substitute for it. If you want the sharper line between a message like this and plain spam, I wrote it out separately in what is a cold email, and what separates it from spam.

The part you never control, and the part you can

A referral explains you, aims well, and arrives at the right moment. The moment is the part that escapes you, and it escapes you in both directions: the referral comes when it comes, and your own outreach stops exactly when you are too busy to send it. An agency owner put it this way:

When I stop outreach, leads stop completely. It feels like I restart the business every 30 days.

One piece of this is measurable. In the United States Census series for services receipts, across eleven years, the first quarter sits at 96.0 against the fourth quarter's 104.6 on an index whose year averages 100. So the quarter when your pipeline is thinnest is the one being fed by the emails you did not have time to write in October. Your own slack quarter may land elsewhere. Look at your last three years of invoices and find it, because that is the date the writing has to be already done by.

Whether any of it arrives

Copy is wasted if the message lands in a spam folder, and the real risk is not a fine. It is a domain that stops being trusted, a mailbox that stops sending, and your invoices no longer reaching clients.

• Set up the three DNS records that let receiving servers confirm the mail is really from you: SPF, DKIM and DMARC. Without them, good copy does not help.
• Send from mailboxes a human reads, and reply within a day. A sender who does not answer replies gets treated like a sender who does not exist.
• If you are going to send at any volume, use a domain that is not the one carrying your invoices and client threads. A sending domain can be rebuilt. The address your accounting system uses cannot, not cheaply.
• Set the daily volume by your own capacity to answer, not by the tool's limit. Twenty emails you can follow beats four hundred you cannot.

What tools cost, and which part they do

Prices below were read from each vendor's own public pricing page with a headless browser on 29 September 2026. Some pages block automated reading or hide the figure behind a demo request, so where I have no number I say so rather than guess. If a figure has changed, write to me and I will correct it. Three different shapes of product get sold as one thing:

• They hand you rows. Clay published tiers I could read at $113, $135, $167, $180, $185, $261 and $1,913, with credits at $0.01 and $0.05. You still decide who is worth writing to, write it, and send it.
• They send sequences. Instantly at $47, $97 and $358 per month. Smartlead at $32, $59 and $78 per month, with add-ons at $59, $39 and $29. Saleshandy at $34, $76 and $149 per month on annual billing, higher month to month at $41, $99 and $189. You bring the list and the words.
• They do the whole chain. AiSDR from $250 per month, with $900 and $2,500 tiers and a managed option at $2,500 per month or $149 per campaign. Regie.ai at $0, $41, $49, $125 and $150. Explee sold in credits, $30 to try, and lines reading from $5 per 1k. For Artisan, 11x, lemlist, Woodpecker, Salesloft, Outreach, ZoomInfo and Lusha I could not read a public price on that date.

My own product belongs in the same list on the same terms. Klientee is $149, $349 and $749 per month per site, published, with no credits and no per seat multiplication. It reads your website, decides who to write to, writes, and sends from your own mailboxes. It fits a service firm with no salesperson that currently depends on word of mouth. It is the wrong purchase for three people: anyone who wants to approve every sentence before it leaves, who is better served by a sending tool and their own writing; anyone whose website never says who the work is for, because there is then nothing to read; and anyone whose order book is full and whose referral channel is working, who does not need this at all this quarter. A longer price by price version of the same list is in the best cold email software.

One observation from doing this

The thing missing most often, when we read a small firm's site to decide who it should write to, is not a list of services. It is any sentence naming who the services are for. A site can describe twelve capabilities and never once say food factories between two and ten lines. That absence is also why the emails are hard to write by hand: you cannot address someone specific until you have decided who specific means. Fixing that sentence on your own site is free, takes an afternoon, and makes every message afterwards easier to write.

Axel Joseph Auguste